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Post by Swearingworth on Jun 3, 2008 14:25:38 GMT -5
And as Paul gazed into the dark endless horizon, he saw dark tendrils protrude from the the rip in the sky. And as they engulfed his body these shadows began consume his soul. His thoughts dissolved. He could not thing of anything but anger and greed. This was not any regular shadow. It was so dark It was almost tangible. It sent a chill through his body. And there was a sudden void where his heart used to be. He felt an eternal emptiness. Yes. I see now. Paul contemplated. I am destined to conquer! Mortals will bow before my unprecedented power! All will feel anguish and dispair! and all who stand in my path will be crush- "Hey you alright?" an approaching figure called. "I brought donuts like you asked!" It was his best friend Albie. I guess world domination will wait till tomorrow.
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Post by ShiningSilver on Jun 3, 2008 14:38:26 GMT -5
Mysterious....
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Post by powdermaster on Jun 3, 2008 16:39:11 GMT -5
comedy: 10/10 mysteriousness: 10/10
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Post by ShiningSilver on Jun 3, 2008 17:05:34 GMT -5
comedy: 9/10 mysteriousness: 10/10 Darkness:10/10 MYSTERIOUS.... I want donuts too
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Post by Hi peoples on Jun 5, 2008 18:55:14 GMT -5
what kind of donuts i like chocolate!
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Post by ROBiT on Jun 6, 2008 22:02:40 GMT -5
Heheh.. nice comedy 10/10 mysteriousness 10/10 total 100/10
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Post by Hi peoples on Jun 7, 2008 14:06:17 GMT -5
u need to add some more to it
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Post by none2 on Jun 7, 2008 15:49:01 GMT -5
I am not good at storytelling.
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Post by ROBiT on Jun 7, 2008 15:51:32 GMT -5
It's ok... I bet there's something else for you, somewhere. Hopefully!
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Post by Hi peoples on Jun 7, 2008 18:54:07 GMT -5
it just needs more so add something
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Post by ROBiT on Jun 7, 2008 22:17:16 GMT -5
What is there to add? It's not a full story.
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Post by Hi peoples on Jun 8, 2008 12:39:28 GMT -5
idk like why theres a giant rift or if he ever takes over the world
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Post by Swearingworth on Jun 8, 2008 15:31:06 GMT -5
((hmm... I might eventually write why there is a tear in space...))
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Post by ROBiT on Jun 8, 2008 15:34:03 GMT -5
Why do you symbolify Paul with a mens restroom sign??? In the picture, I mean.
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Post by Swearingworth on Jun 8, 2008 23:31:56 GMT -5
((its just A generic person shape...))
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Post by ROBiT on Jun 8, 2008 23:35:12 GMT -5
lol I know, but thats the first thing I think when I look at it...
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Post by Hi peoples on Jun 12, 2008 15:33:29 GMT -5
it is sorta like that
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Post by shirogake on Jun 27, 2008 17:57:56 GMT -5
I think maybe flashbacks like why the rift is there, how it existed. Etc.
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Post by Hi peoples on Jul 9, 2008 14:48:12 GMT -5
yeah exactly
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Post by ap6ehw on Jul 11, 2008 7:53:04 GMT -5
You just won your self a free badge from my store
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